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Post by Dominick on Jun 10, 2009 20:14:37 GMT -5
I'm nervous as hell. I just passed this in today, and I think I might just get an A!  So can you guys please tell me what you think. I've put 17 hours into this. Please? Please? |
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Post by indy42 - THE FILMMAKER on Jun 10, 2009 22:29:29 GMT -5
Well, I'll give this the all-american critique. Forgive me if it seems I'm being too harsh here. I have like 6 points here: #1. Whoa man... That's one hell of a header. #2. Just say "Who exactly are 'The people'"? Sure, the other one looks correct, but the other one sounds better... At least, to me. #3. . I'd say "religion to practice/preach". #4. PROSPERO vs. CALIBAN! Fighting over an island, which people shipwrecked on! "The Island is mine! You took it away from me!" Wow... Just wondering, did you write that to seem like an obvious reference to LOST, or was it just me? #5. Don't sound good, mate. Maybe... "Puritans were not finished making their mark on..." yada yada yada.  #6. Yeaaah! Lord of the Flies, man! Lesee, Ralph wants to get rescued, Jack wants to catch wild pigs, power struggles... LOST! Actually, I kinda disagree with you on this. Jack becomes a dictator, taking over other people's lives and losing their morality, giving up humanity for facepaint and spears. In fact, he is the exact opposite of the American Spirit, or at least what the American spirit should be. Americans are supposed to remain on the moral high ground, but Jack represented the immoral in LOTF. Yepp. Otherwise, great essay man. Mostly well written and quite the opus. I wish you luck getting that A. ;D |
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Post by Dominick on Jun 10, 2009 22:46:21 GMT -5
Haha, we read those books in class, my choice in using them for my final. I see what you're saying and stuff. Now I just need to come up with a creative way to convey that message in an oral presentation. ;D Thanks For the feedback! |
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Post by Dominick on Jun 18, 2009 5:33:48 GMT -5
I got an 86%
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